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Unrelenting Distractions by ~Renee85:iconRenee85:



Sleeping with distractions
And quick-fix satisfactions
Adding up the fractions to feel whole.
But band-aiding infractions
And mindless interactions
Will incarcerate the actions of your soul.

Flying with cement wings,
And striving to invent things
To pre-occupy the ventings of your soul.
But seeing through the bent things,
And the endless circumventings,
Will leave you fermenting and unwhole.
©2009 ~Renee85
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:iconwatchukillme:
I felt like the rhyme scheme was more important to you than the message.
:iconrenee85:
i sort of lost the idea midway through the poem and then you're right i focused more on the rhyme scheme than the message behind it. i've had about a year long writer's block going on, but i have a feeling the poems will start bursting out like they used to.. maybe i just need more life experience to inspire me!!

what did you feel like the message was here?

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So I'll fall in love with music and make love to art, though they've no arms to hold me they know my heart <3
:iconwatchukillme:
the message conveyed is "I freakin love Dr. Suess."
:iconrenee85:
haha sweet, i do i do.

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So I'll fall in love with music and make love to art, though they've no arms to hold me they know my heart <3
:iconwatchukillme:
hahaha,
All joking aside,
I guess I can see the glimmer of the messge of being oppressed. Of misery.

But the rhyme is so distracting.
:iconrenee85:
hahaah hey kind of like what the title says... maybe that was the genius of it all unknowingly.... riiight.

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So I'll fall in love with music and make love to art, though they've no arms to hold me they know my heart <3
:iconwatchukillme:
hahaha. uh-huh. sure.

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